A) Different Race, Different Face, Shouldn’t Mean a Different Case
Feedback:
I think how she organizes her description from the foreground to the background is working well though it could include more transitions from sentence to sentence so it doesnt sound like a status report. I also think that the last sentence could be placed after the third sentece that talks about how the image is cropped to keep the flow of the foreground to background going. Maybe include evidence on how she knows the photograph isnt staged to look sincere. She could also add what she believes is the important message the image is portraying unless her goal is to leave it to the readers to find their own interpretation.
Feedback:
I think her ideas are developing well but aren’t complete. It doesn’t seem to have a conclusion or decision as to which candidate is “less evil”. The first two sentences sound a bit confusing; maybe adding a word like reveals which one after “…between ignorance and lies and..” and receive the privilege before “…prevail on election night…” and insert the word person or candidate after “…facial gestures each…” would help it flow better. Overall I think she is on the right track to further developing and analyzing each candidate.