Alexis Buenrostro: My Feedback on his Unit 4 Paper
My feedback: I love this paper. It gives a clear explanation on the access that certain people have within the regions of Georgia State. Also the use of rhetorical questions were a very nice touch to your paper which gave the style of your paper a good reasoning. The sentence fluency and diction used was also a eye catcher, and the hook stating the advise and and progress of the students and the overcoming obstacles and not being able to access certain things was a great push for your thesis. The best part was the images you added, which ultimately supported your claim. The only thing I couldn’t really conclude about this paper was that references. I recommend you to to make sure thee are well explained and understandable, so if it was presented to a different type of audience, it wouldn’t be complicated at all. Great Work!